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The shoes didn't fit. It was an omen.













Monday, March 28, 2011

Three Sentences: Some of My Favorites

 

Today I’ve posted three sentences from this novel. Currently, I’m working on the time lapses and a few plot holes. It’s coming along nicely.

These three sentences reflect Lila’s wedding day, from her mother’s insistence to ill-fitting bridal shoes to hesitating at the altar.

 

“Do you want your future husband to find out that you’re certifiably nuts before the ink is dry?” (Lila and her mother are having an argument in the bridal room before the wedding.)

Miss Koch leaned into the aisle.“You should never buy shoes that don’t fit properly.” (Miss Koch is the dead church spinster but still smells like bug-spray. She showed up for the wedding.)

 

“I thee hiccup hiccup.” My fingers holding the ring jolted back and it dropped to the carpet. (Lila hesitates anyway she can before she says “I do”.)

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12 comments:

  1. Debra Gray-ElliottMarch 28, 2011 at 5:42 AM

    Cool!

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  2. shellyMarch 28, 2011 at 6:04 AM

    @ Debra: Thank you.

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  3. Miranda HardyMarch 28, 2011 at 6:11 AM

    I like those as well. Have a great week!

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  4. shellyMarch 28, 2011 at 7:11 AM

    Thanks, Jen. You have great week, too. And, I won't accidently delete your chapters out of my files again. I'll have them done by Sunday.

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  5. Intangible HeartsMarch 28, 2011 at 8:18 AM

    The dead church lady sounds intriguing. :)

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  6. shellyMarch 28, 2011 at 9:08 AM

    @ Eve: She came to the wedding. It was someone Lila new when she was a little girl that attended the particular church she attended.

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  7. William KendallMarch 28, 2011 at 3:17 PM

    I love the third one most!

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  8. shellyMarch 28, 2011 at 7:46 PM

    @ William: I do, too.

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  9. Lorelei BellApril 4, 2011 at 2:46 PM

    Good lines, Shelly.

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  10. shellyApril 4, 2011 at 2:59 PM

    Thank you, Lorelei.

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  11. NormaMay 7, 2011 at 7:54 AM

    I like number three, too.

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  12. shellyMay 8, 2011 at 4:13 AM

    @Norma: I have more favorites but am in the throws of major edits. Just heard from my editor the other day over another scene. But, I say its up for debate.

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